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There’s no doubt Brahmastra has been one of the most awaited hindi movies in a long time. Promising to kick start a franchise in line with famous ones in Hollywood, I was one of the hopefuls as well. But when the marketing dropped, my hopes started dropping too. Too much songs with newly married leads, too little world-building. Early reviews were indicative of the same, I still went to see it for myself, and God it was such a let down.
Juvenile dialogues, inconsistent characters, unconvincing acting, and a very surface level exploration of world it was aiming to build. Even the love story they wanted to be heart and soul of this movie fell flat. The ancient Indian wisdom creators claimed to be inspired from was just there as lip service. Astra as per epics is generally the name for enchanted projectile weapons, but over here they were shown as wearable talismans, they should have been called yantras instead. Even how do they work wasn’t clarified, everyone is wearing one, but the hero has it in him. Even the working and history of secret society Brahmansh has been glossed over in exposition. What is their role in society, what have they contributed too, how do they select members, nothing has been clarified. Even the antagonist remains an anomaly, why is he in a statue form, how has he got those three followers, how does he transfer powers to them, while others have to wear those Astras on them.
All these questions shouldn’t have been raised if the storyboard was worked on with same focus as the special effects. What ended up on screen looked like a school play in terms of storytelling. The premise was decent, nothing wrong with that, but the execution was immature, even an amateur story writer like me can say that. It has been jogging my mind for past couple of days, how could I have written that? How would have I improved character motivation and given the universe more depth? Here’s my take on it with the same premise.
Brahmansh, a society built by Rishis who were trying to find the secret behind world’s working through tapasya and yagnas. They unlocked the energy driving forces of nature, they created yantras to invoke, contain and control them. They named them after their properties, calling the elemental powers as such, and calling other powers the name of animals they resemble in nature, just like we used to name stars and constellations. They turned those powers in tools, weaponised them and called them Astras. They intended to help society with these powers, protect it and give it direction. At the end of it, they unlocked the supreme energy, the ultimate energy of creation and destruction, the Brahma energy. They didn’t know how to control it, now that it was released. It was laying inconceivable destruction, and Brahmansh were helpless. Then the elders sacrificed themselves to contain the power into a Chakra, and called it Brahmastra. Now keeping Brahmastra away from other humans, and to keep its powers contained was one of the prime directives of Brahmansh. They went back to civilisation, started helping them in the ways they can. To be a Brahmansh, you needed innate capability to be able to channel the Astra’s powers. For this reason, the numbers kept dwindling for a lot of history. To find a potential Brahmansh, they had a Manas Astra in form of a headband, which gives the users psychic powers. But still, travelling in old days was a difficult task, and only a few Brahmansh could achieve full potential of their Astras. The capability of Astras were also dependant on capability and emotional state of users, so they had destructive tendency if user lost control over themselves. That’s why Brahmansh avoided lust for power, as it was detrimental for their own good. A few instances had shown that, resulting in inner conflicts. That’s why they depended on societal leadership. If the rulers were good, they flourished and created monuments, if rulers were bad, they would scram into shadows. The worst phase happened during colonial rule, when British subverted Indian culture, and Brahmansh were reduced to a skeleton crew, only good enough to protect Brahmastra.
After independence, they start rebuilding again. They build their new Ashram in an island in Andaman and Nicobar, near the Kalapani prison where many members were imprisoned before, and away from large population. Then comes Dev, a child from a well off family which lost everything to freedom struggle. Having lost last of his family and recently orphaned, he is picked up by Brahmansh leaders to be a new member. He has innate capability never seen before, he masters not one but multiple Astras. But he also is emotionally volatile, and that roots from deep trauma. He believes Brahmansh could have taken active leadership and guided the society with its power instead of hiding away. That way, his family and many others wouldn’t have suffered. With modern communication and travelling, it would be easier to grow Brahmansh into a large and formidable force. The elders know this isn’t the right way of thinking, and has never bore good results in past. But Dev is too good and powerful to listen to them. Only person who can calm him down is Amrita, his love, his one true guiding light. She keeps his ambitions from straying away. She has become powerful too with Dev. But things change when she informs him that she’s pregnant. Dev’s ambition resurface. He can’t let his child be born in this unsafe world. He can’t let his child lose everything like he did. So he decides to take things in his own hands. He gathers some of the Astras he has mastered, including Kavach and Manas, and goes to master one Astra nobody has ever been able to, Brahmastra. The powers it contains, will allow him to make the world a safe place, for everyone he loves. And he is the master of Agniastra, the closest Astra to Brahmastra in nature. But Brahmastra is untameable, nobody has even invoked it in millennia. The uncontainable Brahmastra starts wrecking chaos, but Dev is undeterred. He is determined to master Brahmastra at any cost, and he has Agniastra, the power of which allows him to withstand its might. Brahmansh are helpless, but Amrita is not. She, a master of Jalastra confronts her husband. Nobody knows what exactly happened on the island, it went underwater, and only two pieces of broken chakra of Brahmastra made it to other island on Amrita’s boat. The couple is nowhere to be seen. Dev lost the very thing he wanted to protect.
Brahmansh has to scatter again, the elders decide to move Ashram close to Himalayas, where they first assembled. With Manas Astra gone with Dev, its difficult to track new potential Brahmansh, so the growth of society is again slacked. The two pieces of Brahmastra are given to two bright young members, an artist and a scientist. The members of Brahmansh tend to be bright people, for they have an innate understanding of world and the energy driving it. The scientist is living in Delhi, working in his penthouse on his next astrophysics project. He is ambushed by two men, both demonstrating near superhuman capability. He hides Brahmastra with illusion and dons his Vanarastra to escapes them. Thinking he eluded them, he goes back to recover the hidden piece, but is ambushed by a third lady. This one has real superpowers, psychic capability which immediately subdues the scientist as he is taken by surprise. The lady binds him and starts piercing his mind, this is the power of Manas Astra. She starts getting glimpses of all Brahmansh, but this search triggers telepathic flashes in an unsolicited character. Shiva, a carefree yet selfless guy, working as a guardian at an orphanage by day and DJ by evening is in Dussehra mela, suddenly starts getting visions of people he has never seen before. They are weak at the moment, nothing but light flashes. During the festivities, he gazes upon a face, most beautiful face he has seen. Suddenly the selfless carefree guy wants someone for himself. She’s standing a the front of puja pandal. The automatic fireworks designed to burn Raavan effigy miscues a bit, and a stray streak fires a bit too low. It’ll land close to where the girl is standing, so Shiva, who’s pyrophobic though, is suddenly over his fear and twitches at the fire. He doesn’t know how but the stray firestreak deflects towards sky away from everyone, and burst in an unreal fashion. Everyone is enthralled, and overwhelmed Shiva passes out. The events from here till Shiva reaching the Ashram could follow the same story, with some improved dialogues.
The story could have begun in film where it did, with addition I said shown through flashbacks and narration. The reason why some people need to wear Astras while some can channel the energy within themselves would be because of Dev’s mastery. He was able to master many astras, Agni, Manas, Kavach, Jal, Vanar, and Nandi to include some. He was able to use basic powers of Astras even without wearing them. And through powers of Manas Astra, he had learnt to share powers with anyone he wanted. That’s why Amrita, whom he loved most was more powerful with her Astra than others. When Amrita went to stop him, he wouldn’t listen, so she channelled all her powers to break the Brahmastra Chakra, but that unleashed even more destructive power. With his wife and unborn child in danger, he tried to contain the energy himself, but even he was unable to. Amrita gives her Jalastra to him, to help him use both fire and water. In containing the Brahma energy, Dev turns into a statue, one of the mysterious powers of Brahmastra. Thinking her husband is gone, Amrita takes one piece of Chakra and disappears. She’ll keep doing her task of protecting Brahmastra, but doesn’t want her child to go down the same path as her husband. The remaining pieces are handed over to Dev’s best protégés, masters of Vanar and Nandi Astra, while next most powerful Guru is made the new leader, as former leaders fell trying to stop Dev. But Dev is still alive inside that statue, not fully conscious, but in emotional consciousness state. He’s yearning for his family, keeps looking for them with Manas Astra. Amrita is trying to fight his advances, she has understood, in this form, he is unstable. She doesn’t want him to know that they have a son now. Dev grows impatient, trying to look for her. In his anger, he inadvertently activates Agniastra. Amrita sacrifices herself, but protects her son. A young Shiva, who has power of Agniastra through his connection to his father, is unharmed, but unable do anything to protect his mother. He doesn’t even understand what’s happening. But Amrita’s sacrifice has protected him from his father’s discovery.
The broken soul of Dev has nothing left to care for in the world. He’s just a manifestation of his anger and ambition now. Through his Manas astra, he starts looking for potential allies, kids who could have become Brahmansh. He picks one Junoon as his primary disciple. Through psychic connections, he brainwashes her and teaches her use of Astras. He does the same with two others, Zor and Raftaar. As he’s physically not present, it takes some time. He transfers Astra powers he has mastered psychically. As he doesn’t posses Vanarastra and Nandiastra physically, Raftaar and Zor only have fraction of the powers, which they gain fully later. Then he sends his disciples after Brahmansh. Most live a private life, but scientist Mohan Bhargav is quite famous, so he’s discovered first. When Junoon uses the Manas Astra to discover all hiding Brahmansh, this reactivates the psychic link in Shiva which had been broken for years, now he can see glimpses of what his father sees through the powers he shared. This, coupled with his yearn to protect Isha, the same yearn his father had to protect his family, activates his Agni powers. Every time, he feels the need to protect her, his power comes forth. Guruji helps him in channelling that power. After the final showdown, when the once again connected Brahmastra goes out of control. Isha is right in way of danger, and Shiva jumps to her rescue. Shiva is ready to sacrifice himself for her, and this calms down Brahmastra, just as the sacrifice of first elders had in the beginning. Brahmastra can only be tamed with selfless sacrifice. But in this process of rejoining and calming, Brahmastra has absorbed its stray energy. Thousands of kilometers away, the statue breaks, and Dev, who has regained his physical form flies up in the sky. He has spent decades trapped with Brahmastra’s powers, no one knows what that has resulted into, and what mental state he is in. That is a question for another day.
This storyline, coupled with some mature dialogues could have resulted in a deeper world, that I am certain of. A lot of questions still arises, but they are of intrigue rather than confusion. For a franchise, a lot of plot points are needed to be left for a sequel, but if you don’t put a solid foundation first, there would be no excitement for it. I still hope the series continues, and the story matures with coming installments. Till then, it’ll remain an unfulfilled potential.